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im comin back as drastic as a relapse attack of a bad 'have to have it' habit
you can't escape the fact that you can't shake it and thats the power of its magic
changin the earth up in this piece isnt worth the stress if there is to be no release
and loudmouths blabbering with their hands out is no reason for me to aim to please
so this shit MUST cease....... i live to believe that something has got to give
i'm convinced the definition directly relates to whether or not it is intuitive
but in its truest sense, there exists no questioning at all of any of this
and thats why i dont defend myself when it comes to any of this
the moral implications of hittin the floor will shake up the picture with more complex complications than ever before
you can not ignore the fact when it's in your face and you step back and then brace for impact cuz you taste it
its bitter, the burn of harsh reality vs. shards of broken fantasies will hardly bring back what is actually happening...
unfinished... but i had to share it
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Gypsy2222 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2012
Pretty impressive... Cant wait to see the finished work...
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bobbiwright Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2012
?unfinished? thats a matter of opionin i like it just the way it is,,,,good job mr.
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Alyssa00045 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Omg, I LOVE this. Seriously.
Can't wait to see it finished~
Keep up the epicness c:
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DavidAtwell Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2012
epicness? aw shucks... really?
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Alyssa00045 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, deffinitly.
If there's a word better than epicness. Then you're that. Lol.
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hey my new friend :wave:

İt's a nice piece. Though İ think you may have to go with short sentences, this way İt will help you express yourself better. :)

İ like it :dalove:
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DavidAtwell Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2012
thank you! i appreciate the feedback, but the looooong sentences were purposefully long.... its spoken word poetry, and in this piece im trying to express a heated up/anxious tone by use of rapid-fire delivery... it works better with increased tempo and a pissed-off look on your face...
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
İ get it now :) You are right, İ know what you mean.
İ think its better with a pissed off look too :D
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